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 Mosheh: well, according to the prophets he is “The God” and “The Neo-Tech God”.
 
-Selena: why Neo-Tech.
+Selena: why Neo-Tech?
 
 Mosheh: because we are part of “The Neo-Tech conspiracy for establish the
-Semitic culture”
+Semitic culture”.
 
 Selena: wasn't it established thousands of years ago?
 
 Selena: got it.
 
 Selena: OK, so people dispelled in the past, and they needed me as some kind
-of role model to look up to to dispel. How lame!
+of role model to look up to, in order to dispel. How lame!
 
 +++: But what were these slaying tests, with The Guide, and these weird demons,
 and… God, they made me feel so helpless, and mad, and sad, and… all for becoming
 Mosheh: we both did.
 
 Selena: two of the founders of the Jewish religion, and mythical and highly
-revered characters, whom lots of religious people would be exhilirated to talk
+admired characters, whom lots of religious people would be exhilarated to talk
 to had nothing better to do with their time than play a silly computerised
 adventure game?
 
 Selena: yes, I gather it existed, only it seems that the Qs cannot be
 omnipotent.
 
-Mosheh: they are not. They are regular humanoids, often aliens who have
+Mosheh: they are not. They are regular humanoids, or other aliens, who have
 ascended to be vampires and Qs, and who possess extremely powerful (but not
 omnipotent or “supernatural”) technology.
 
 
 Mosheh: you guessed it.
 
-Selena: OK, I'm still mad at you. But since I'm still find all this fascinating
-(got to being an Archaeologist-wannabe and stuff), I'm going to continue talking
+Selena: OK, I’m still mad at you. But since I still find all this fascinating
+(got to be an Archaeologist-wannabe and stuff), I’m going to continue talking
 to you, despite being mad.
 
 Mosheh: sure. You may wish to know that the Bajoran scholars considered
 baby born to English parents on French soil. I grew up among French children,
 who welcomed me as their own, but when my parents and I returned back to
 England when I was 5 years old, I was ridiculed for my French, and so
-wanted to hear nothing of it, until I was older and had to learn French much
+wanted to hear nothing of it, until I was older and had to relearn French much
 more painfully.
 
 Selena: but you still had a trace of a French accent…
 it, and consider the various characters there as my friends.
 
 +++: Moreover, I organised various shows by children at the local parish
-of the Bible, often with a lot of humour thrown it to captivate the crowd. Our
+of the Bible, often with a lot of humour thrown in, in order to captivate the
+crowd. Our
 minister believed that this was blasphemous, so he summoned the local Bishop
 to see, who not only enjoyed our shows, but told the priest that we were making
 the Bible something living and dynamic, and so it was to be encouraged.
 
 +++: As a result, I quickly became notorious for my shows, which also
-captured the attention of the local nobelty, the Lords of
+captured the attention of the local nobility, the Lords of
 
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