Correct university into college. Thanks to muskrateer.
+ Start correcting the English phrasing to be more somewhat
+ more mature. Thanks to ssta (from Freenode) and Joel
always show in movies. I’m in my high-school senior year now.
- Let me tell you some things about myself. The first thing is that
- I’m an honours student. I especially like Mathematics. Its high school
- exercises are easy and fun and the difficult ones, which can be
- found in puzzle books and Math competitions, are very challenging.
+ Allow me to introduce myself further. The first thing to note is that
+ I’m an honours student. I especially like Mathematics, whose high
+ school exercises are easy and fun and the difficult ones, which can be
+ found in puzzle books and Math competitions, are challenging.
I’m also good in other subjects, but Math is really my passion.
Other than that I’m blonde, have a cute face (I don’t really consider
myself beautiful, but most guys seem to think so) and try to
very elegantly. As a Math geek, I sure have a social life.
+ dress elegantly. As a Math geek, I sure have a social life.
Everybody around me seems to like me.
- Finally, I should tell about Taylor, Taylor Lawrence. He’s my best
- friend. We became friends when we were in the fourth
- grade and were both grounded for 4 weeks. We instantly became friends.
- When we were 12 and we started having, eh, sexual sensations, we
- started dating each other. Then we both had a crush on different
- people, and we were relieved when we found out. We decided exploring
- our feelings would not be a worthwhile goal, and we dated other
+ Finally, I should tell about Taylor Lawrence, who is my best
+ friend. When we were in the fourth grade and were both grounded
+ for 4 weeks, and instantly became friends.
+ When we were 12, we started having, eh, sexual sensations, so we
+ started dating each other at first. However, we then both had a crush
+ on different people, and we were relieved when we found out. We
+ decided exploring our feelings would not be a worthwhile goal, and we
+ dated other people since.
Taylor is probably even more popular than I am. Even though he wears
prescription glasses, he looks great, and girls almost always agree
- to go with him on dates. (And sometimes ask him themselves.) One thing
- he seems to like and I don’t is computers. He spends hours on end
+ to go with him on dates, and sometimes ask him out themselves. One
+ thing he seems to like and I don’t is computers. He spends hours on end
tampering with his computer at home. Mine, on the other hand, is
almost always turned off. I have good hand writing, thank you, so I
don’t need a word processor. I turn it on only to listen to audio
- files, do some random browsing
in the Internet (either for research,
+ files, do some random browsing n the Internet (either for research,
or to kill time or whatever) or play Freecell or Tetris. I think
computers are impersonal and boring.
It all started one day, when I was attending class, paying attention
to the teacher, when suddenly it hit me: I don’t have any
special skills, and have never really been involved in the community.
- So, no prestigious college will prefer me over someone else. This has
- worried me so much that for the rest of the day, I just wrote down
- what the teacher said in my notebook thoughtlessly, and kept worrying
+ So, no prestigious college will prefer me over someone else. This
+ bothered me so much that for the rest of the day, I just mechanically
+ wrote down what the teacher said in my notebook, and kept worrying
- I really
want to graduate from somewhere nice, so I can be proud
+ I really to graduate from somewhere nice, so I can be proud
of myself, and have the entire world at my disposal. But my entire
life I’ve been concerned only about myself and my friends, trying to
- be happy
, (and having a pretty good success at it), and just doing
+ be happy (and ing success at it), and just doing
what my studies required me to do. I’ve never really been involved in
anything for the community. And I never found it necessary to get
any special skills, unless you call hitting the gym twice a week
- (with Taylor), jogging and biking special.
+ (with Taylor), jogging and biking special.
So I was relieved when I met Taylor that day, when we both finished
“OK, OK. How about Latin or Hebrew or Greek?”
- “I have enough problems with Spanish, thank you.”
+ “I have a hard enough time studying Spanish, and you know
+ how all of its vocabulary just clutters my mind, and I do not really
+ need to learn another language.”
“Si, comprendo.” Taylor said. “OK, OK”, he continued. “I know -
From talking to Taylor, I already knew that hacker did not
necessarily mean a computer intruder, but rather someone who
accomplished things very enthusiastically. So I told him:
+ . So I told him:
“Open-source hacker? You know perfectly well that I’m a
Jonathan is my boyfriend, and has been since the start of the
- eleventh grade. He’s the best boyfriend I ever had. He also likes to
- build machines with wires, batteries, and many other components. He
- and Taylor have become good friends.
+ eleventh grade. He likes to build machines with wires, batteries, and
+ many other components. Taylor and he have become good friends.
“Electronics? You know I have two left hands with these kind of
but you’re left-handed!”
+ “Jenn, you’re left-handed!”
“So I have two right hands! Taylor, are we going to argue
- I followed him for a few hallways and then entered
with him into a
+ I followed him for a few hallways and then entered a
computer lab. There he walked over to some figure (looked like a girl)
- “Hiiiii…” I heard an enthusiastic fem
ale voice. “Whatcha doing here?”
+ “Hiiiii…” I heard an enthusiastic feme voice. “Whatcha doing here?”
“Jenn, please come here. Jenn I’d like you to meet Eve Siegel, who