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From bruck@actcom.net.il Thu Aug 22 08:29:18 2002 Date: Wed, 21 Aug 2002 22:45:32 +0300 (EET DST) From: Uri Bruck  To: Shlomi Fish  Subject: Re: Translation of "The Cathedral and the Bazaar" to Hebrew      [ The following text is in the "ISO-8859-1" character set. ]     [ Your display is set for the "US-ASCII" character set.  ]     [ Some characters may be displayed incorrectly. ]    Hi, Just from a cursory looks a few sentences that jumped to my eye as "too English":  "לינוקס הינה חתרנית"   - הינה looks like a redundant raising of register, and I'd add מערכת הפעלה.  "מספר אלפים של מפתחים המפוזרים "   - מספר אלפי מפתחים  "עד לזמן שלינוקס נכנסה למסך הראדאר שלי " - 'עד לזמן' sounds very English. Simply 'עד שלינוקס...' would be much better. That radar screen metaphore doesn't work in Hebrew nearly as well as it does in English. Now that I look at the English it seems that 'עד ש..' is not what the original says. "By the time .., I had already been involved.." means that when he learned of linux, he had already been involved with unix and open source. I'd suggest rewriting the sentence like this (this is perfectly acceptable in translation): "בתחילת 1993, כשלינוקס חדרה למודעות שלי, היה לי כבר ניסון של 10 שנים של מעורבות בפיתוח של תוכנות יוניקס וקוד-פתוח."  "העבודה דרשה את זה!"  - 'it' should rarely be translated as 'זה' here I'd write "העבודה דרשה זאת"  how many words is the entire text?   On Wed, 21 Aug 2002, Shlomi Fish wrote:  > > I started translating ESR's "The Cathedral and the Bazaar". I finished the > first chapter and would like to continue to the rest. If anyone wishes to > assist me, I will happily delegate some chapters to him or her. > (alternatively, you can copy edit) > > You can find what I did so far, here: > > http://vipe.technion.ac.il/~shlomif/catb-heb.html > > Regards, > > 	Shlomi Fish > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > Shlomi Fish        shlomif@t2.technion.ac.il > Home Page:         http://t2.technion.ac.il/~shlomif/ > Home E-mail:       shlomif@iglu.org.il > > "Let's suppose you have a table with 2^n cups..." > "Wait a second - is n a natural number?" > > > ================================================================= > To unsubscribe, send mail to linux-il-request@linux.org.il with > the word "unsubscribe" in the message body, e.g., run the command > echo unsubscribe | mail linux-il-request@linux.org.il >  -- Thanks, Uri http://translation.israel.net