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Correct some phrasing problems in the English The Enemy.

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 <p>"Because I came here to file my resignation."</p>
 <p>"No way! Just ten minutes ago the other Member of the Organisation resigned."</p>
 <p>"Really?" I asked him.</p>
-<p>"Yes. He is now bids the other members farewell."</p>
+<p>"Yes. He is now bidding the other members farewell."</p>
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 <p>"Why did he quit?" </p>
 <p>"This and that. Said something that he couldn’t take all this stress any longer, and that he wishes to find a stable job and raise a family. He also noted that ‘it was fun to serve in the Organisation, but it’s time to move on.’  "</p>
 <p>"Yes, but as they say: when it rains it pours. Well, just sign here and I’ll take care of all the other paperwork." </p>
 <p>After I started filling it, I said to him: “about the salary you gave me...”</p>
 <p>“Forget it!” the commander said and continued “during your service in the Organisation, you've done a great service to your people and your country. You've earned your pay, even if not honestly, and we thank you that you've joined our ranks at all in the first place. I just hope that during your civil life, you'll continue to maintain the spirit of the organisation and its philosophy.”</p>
-<p>“I'll do my best, sir.” I told him with a snap while I signed it. Then I rose up and we shook hands. I thought a little about what the commander just said, and then recalled something and sat down. "Look, it may no longer be so relevant" I said to him "but I’ve been a member of the Organisation for two years and nobody ever told me what the philosophy of the Organisation was. What is it, really?"</p>
+<p>“I'll do my best, sir.” I told him hastily while I signed it. Then I rose up and we shook hands. I thought a little about what the commander just said, and then recalled something and sat down. "Look, it may no longer be so relevant" I said to him "but I’ve been a member of the Organisation for two years and nobody ever told me what the philosophy of the Organisation was. What is it, really?"</p>
 <p>"Ah… the philosophy? I am surprised that it hadn’t been presented to you yet. In any case, I’d be happy to give you an answer, the ex-Member of the Organisation. Now, how should I start? Oh, I know. So here goes:</p>
 <p>The philosophy of the Organisation is very simple: our goal is to fight the Enemy with all our power. It is a holy war of our people against that criminal nation, and even though the well being of our people and its future are not at stake, it’s a war of the utmost importance. At least according to what we are told all the time or that we keep telling each other.</p>
 <p>We must sacrifice everything in order to achieve this purpose by our struggle with the Enemy, even the lives of the members of our people, which for their interest we are acting in the first place. And we have indeed done it successfully, and when I look back I realise one thing: we have been doing it and we are still doing it, despite all the difficulties. True – we had some difficult times. But they were nothing compared to the almost impossible times, which we usually have to operate in.</p>
 <p>Thus, we fully deny the Organum, or at least don’t view it as indispensable."</p>
 <p>"In that case, it is excellent." I said to him. "I read the ‘Organum’ of Aristotle and although it is a very interesting document in the field of pure logic, I must say that I also had doubts about it. I’m very glad that the Organisation rejects it, because in my opinion this fact may facilitate its activity considerably. For instance, if A could be not-A then because the members of the Organisation are not the soldiers of the Enemy, they can in-fact be its soldiers. In my opinion, if you kill each other, you can save a lot of resources, because the Enemy would be right within your reach. Plus, there will not be a risk of any casualties since all the men that can possibly get hurt will belong to the Enemy’s forces. The element of members risking their lives while infiltrating the Enemy’s lines will not exist either, nor will the possibility of the Enemy bombarding you."</p>
 <p>"Amazing!" cried the commander as he raised from the chair excitedly. "Why didn’t I think of that before? I’ll make sure your proposal is implemented right away, and I’ll inform all the other posts and the Organisation’s headquarters about it. It will be a turn-point in our war against the Enemy. I thank you, the ex-Member, you have definitely enlightened me."</p>
-<p>"The pleasure is all mine. Bye!" I told him while rising from my chair.</p>
-<p>"Good bye to you too." He said while barely phasing out of the arrangements he started in order to implement my proposal.</p>
+<p>"The pleasure is all mine, sir. Bye!" I told him while rising from my chair.</p>
+<p>"Good bye to you, too." He said while barely phasing out of the arrangements he started in order to implement my proposal.</p>
 <p>I left the room and then spent some time at the rest of the post. I parted from the other members and also found the other member that resigned that day. I suggested to him that we’ll go back together, and we indeed left the post’s yard and started walking on the path that lead back to the village.</p>
 <p>We started chatting, but it was not five minutes before we heard a sound of an explosion coming from the post, just as we climbed a hill that overlooked it. We turned around and watched in terror how the members of the Organisation kill each other. They split into two opposing sides and fought each other to the knife with every weapon in the post: guns, grenades, mortars, bombs. They even blew up the missile storage.</p>
 <p>At the end, only one member was left alive, and he stood on the roof of the post’s ruin and jumped happily while holding his machine-gun over his head. Then, the commander came out of his room and shot him three times at the stomach using a pistol. The member fell to the ground, dead. </p>
 <p>The commander retrieved his pistol to its sheath, and went back into his office. We heard him write something on his typewriter, and when he exited he placed a letter into the mailbox of the post. We assumed it was a report regarding the successful operation we had just witnessed, which was intended for the Organisation’s headquarters. After he put the letter in the mailbox, he turned towards his office while rubbing his hands. Afterwards, he took out his pistol, turned around and shot a bullet at his head.</p>
 <p>After the other ex-Member and I witnessed all this, we shrugged, turned around and continued to walk towards the village.</p>
 <h2 id="terrorist_that_returned_from_the_cold">2. The Terrorist that Returned from the Cold</h2>
-<p>After we arrived at the village, we parted and each one of us returned to his home. It was approximately 7 am, when I opened the door of my house. No one was in the living room, so I sat on the coach, took off my shoes and, as I was used to, placed my feet on the table. Then I remembered that such an action was not appropriate for someone who lives in the house, so I took my feet off the table, put my shoes back on, and placed my feet back on the table.</p>
+<p>After we arrived at the village, we parted and each one of us returned to his house. It was approximately 7 am, when I opened the door of mine. No one was in the living room, so I sat on the coach, took off my shoes and, as I was used to, placed my feet on the table. Then I remembered that such an action was not appropriate for someone who lives in the house, so I took my feet off the table, put my shoes back on, and placed my feet back on the table.</p>
 <p>I started to hum a popular tune, like I used to do many times after I returned home after an exhausting day of work at the Organisation. I must note that despite my extraordinary intelligence, even I sometimes forget stuff. In this case I forgot that during the previous times, I returned home only during the evenings. </p>
 <p>A few seconds after I started to sing, I heard some noise from the adjacent room and then several whispers, which seemed like they were coming from the direction of the corridor.</p>
 <p>Why, the hell, are you making noise now?!" shouted in whisper a feminine voice, that I recognised as the voice of my younger sister.</p>
 <p> And so I went to look for a job at the village’s grocery. I had to stand in line and when my turn cam the grocer said to me: "Good day to you! We don’t see you around here often since you joined the Organisation."</p>
 <p>"Actually, I quit this very day. I was wondering if you have any job for me."</p>
 <p>"Thanks to your wonderful organisation I don’t. Do you remember that, three weeks ago, the post next to the neighboring village tried to fire a missile at one of the Enemy’s posts but instead it hit this grocery store by accident? The missile ruined half of the ceiling and reaped a large hole in the west wall. The renovations here cost me a fortune, and although I could really use some help here, I really don’t have the money for a worker’s wage. Maybe some other time."</p>
-<p>"That does it!" I said to myself – I had to react to it. "Sir, ", I said to him firmly, "I’ve heard some rather weak excuses for a weak financial status today that I decided to keep silent about, but I’m not ready to simply return to the agenda after such a poor excuse.</p>
+<p>"That does it!" I said to myself – I had to take action against such a crime against logic. "Sir, ", I said to him firmly, "I’ve heard some rather weak excuses for a weak financial status today that I decided to keep silent about, but I’m not ready to simply resume my daily agenda after such a poor excuse.</p>
 <p>If your business is in bad shape, try to find out what you didn’t do well and don’t blame someone else. This excuse is non-factual, not to the point, inconsistent and simply unconvincing. Even a bad politician would not have used an excuse like that.</p>
 <p>Even if you had a job to offer me, I wouldn’t agree to work for you. Have a good day. Maybe I’ll come back in the evening, hear from you what happened to you today, and then I’ll be able give you another ten excuses why your financial state is bad recently. And believe me that all of them will be better than the one you gave me this instant!"</p>
 <p>And so I left the place in anger. A complete lack of reason is always an irritating thing, not to mention that there was a personal insult involved in it too.</p>