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   <chapter id="to_the_lion_den">
       <info><title>To the Lion's Den</title></info>
   <para>The Limousine drove me back to the hotel and there I went to sleep, after barely taking off my clothes. I slept a lot that night. When I woke up in the morning it was already Ten O'clock, and I decided to order a small breakfast to my room. The flight back home was only due in the evening, so I had plenty of time; usually I would have used the opportunity to continue my tour of the metropolis, but the interview and the preparations for it exhausted me physically and mentally.</para>
-  <para>Therefore I decided to stay in my room and watch television. I was happy for the chance to see so many series at once, something that was not usually possible in the village. When I saw sitcoms I decided that I'll keep guessing what the next punch-line would be. All in all I was successful in 23.3 percent of the cases. Not bad for a beginner.</para>
-  <para>Eventually I got tired of watching television and I went down to the hotel's lobby. While I sat there I thought about the book I was going to write about everything that happened to me. I started planning the style in which I would write it, how I'll negotiate with the publisher, how much money I should demand as an initial offer, and what circulation could it have. But then I realized something: despite the fact that I am one of the men who had the most enormous effect on worldwide politics in the last few years, if not in the last few decades, it wouldn't be probable that my book would be very successful. First, I wouldn't be able to describe many events in it, because the majority of the readers would not want me to describe the period in which I served in the Organisation. Moreover, I came to a realisation that there is another aspect of the affair which I did not cover yet.</para>
-  <para>Thus I reached the conclusion that in order for the book to succeed, I must visit the Enemy's country. I realised that I also have a patriotic motive to do this, because I could integrate the collection of important intelligence information about the Enemy, into the visit. So, I rose from my seat, went out of the hotel, ordered a cab and went to the Enemy's embassy.</para>
-  <para>I entered the embassy and the way embassies are I had to stand in line in order to talk with the clerk. After I waited in line for about half an hour, I managed to speak with her at last, and declared my desire to visit the Enemy's country. She gave me a form and asked me to fill in my details. I took the form, took out a pen from the pocket of my shirt and started to fill the form. In my opinion, it was a very inefficient form and practically unnecessary. Judge for yourself:</para>
+  <para>Therefore I decided to stay in my room and watch television. I was happy for the chance to see so many series at once, something that was not usually possible in the village. When I saw sitcoms I decided that I'll keep trying to guess what the next punch-line would be. All in all, I was successful in 23.3 percent of the times. Not bad for a beginner.</para>
+  <para>Eventually I got tired of watching television and I went down to the hotel's lobby. While I sat there I thought about the book I was going to write about everything that happened to me. I started planning the style in which I would write it, how I'll negotiate with the publisher, how much money I should demand as an initial offer, and what circulation it would have. But then I realized something: despite the fact that I am one of the men who had the most enormous effect on worldwide politics in the last few years, if not in the last few decades, it wouldn't be probable that my book would be very successful. First, I wouldn't be able to describe many events in it, because the majority of the readers would not want me to describe the period in which I served in the Organisation. Moreover, I came to a realisation that there is another aspect of the affair which I did not cover yet.</para>
+  <para>Therfore I reached the conclusion that in order for the book to succeed, I must visit the Enemy's country. I realised that I also have a patriotic motive to do this, because I could integrate the collection of important intelligence information about the Enemy, into the visit. So, I rose from my seat, went out of the hotel, ordered a cab and went to the Enemy's embassy.</para>
+  <para>I entered the embassy, and the way embassies are I had to stand in line in order to talk with the clerk. After I waited in line for about half an hour, I managed to speak with her at last, and declared my desire to visit the Enemy's country. She gave me a form and asked me to fill in my details. I carried the from to a table, took out a pen from the pocket of my shirt and started to fill the form. In my opinion, it was a very inefficient form, and a practically unnecessary one. Judge for yourself:</para>
   <para>“Private Name:”, in this field I wrote: “The ex-Member of the Organisation”.</para>
   <para>“Family Name:”, in this field I wrote: “The family of the ex-Member of the Organisation”.</para>
   <para>“Address: Home of the family of the ex-Member of the Organisation; The Village; The Country”.</para>
-  <para>“Sex [also species]: Human (Homo Sapiens).” It was hard for me to believe that there is at the moment another species of organisms that can fill the form, but I let it slide.</para>
-  <para>“Citizenship: The Country.” I assumed that for diplomatic purposes it existed.</para>
+  <para>“Sex [also species]: Human (Homo Sapiens).” It was hard for me to believe that there is, at present, another species of organisms that can fill the form, but I let it slide.</para>
+  <para>“Citizenship: The Country.” I assumed that it existed for diplomatic purposes.</para>
   <para>“Marital Status [= Familiar Status] : son, brother, grandson, nephew, uncle, cousin, brother-in-law.” I assumed they were not interested in more distant relations.</para>
   <para>“Purpose of the visit:”, I decided to be honest with them, so they won't cause me trouble so I wrote “hostile espionage” in this field.</para>
   <para>“Criminal record:”, since all my activity as a member of the Organisation had been performed on a national background I wrote: “None” in this field.</para>
   <para>“Duration of stay:”, it was hard for me to estimate it so I wrote: “Undefined, unknown, inaccessible and/or cannot be approximated or extrapolated.”</para>
-  <para>After I finished filling the form, I waited in line for another clerk. When my turn arrived I gave her my form along with my passport and told her I wish to visit her country. The clerk looked at the form and then distorted her face from perplexity. “Sir, I'm afraid this form is not filled well.” She told me.</para>
-  <para>“Really?” I answered, “Why not?”</para>
+  <para>After I finished filling the form, I waited in line for another clerk. When my turn arrived, I gave her my form along with my passport and told her I wish to visit her country. The clerk looked at the form and then distorted her face from perplexity. “Sir, I'm afraid this form is not filled well.”, she told me.</para>
+  <para>“Really?”, I answered, “Why not?”</para>
   <para>“For instance under 'Sex' you were supposed to write if you're a male or a female.”</para>
   <para>“And I thought it meant a biological species. The name of this field mislead me. In my opinion, you should change it to 'sexual status' or 'sexual tendency'.”</para>
   <para>“Ahah. I'm afraid some people will interpret those terms in a completely different way.”</para>
   <para>“In that case, what do you think of 'gender'?”</para>
   <para>“A correct but infrequent term. I'll forward your suggestion to the higher levels.”</para>
-  <para>“I thank you in advance, on my behalf and the behalf of the embassy's customers that will come after me.”</para>
-  <para>“Yes, and besides in 'Marital Status' you were supposed to fill in if you're single or married with or without children and so on.”</para>
-  <para>“Oh, if I had been married I would have also written there that I'm a husband, son-in-law, brother-in-law and so forth while if I had had children I would have also put 'father'.”</para>
+  <para>“I thank you in advance, on my behalf and the behalf of the embassy's patrons that will follow me.”</para>
+  <para>“Yes, and besides in 'Marital Status' you were supposed to fill in if you're single or married, with or without children, and so on.”</para>
+  <para>“Oh! If I had been married, I would have also written there that I'm a husband, son-in-law, brother-in-law and so forth while if I had had children I would have also put 'father'.”</para>
   <para>“O.K., but it seems to me that there is a more serious problem. You are the citizen of the Country, which is in a state of war with us; you were a member of the Organisation and took a part in terrorist activity that was aimed against us, and if that's not enough you write that the purpose of your visit is 'hostile espionage'. I don't think we can let you in our country that way.”</para>
-  <para>“In my opinion, you should have an interest to let me in now. After all, I am the ex-Member of the Organisation, a person with a central role and a long-term effect on politics. If I stood in chage of your security institutions, I would be very happy if I were able to interview myself, and I can't see a better chance to do that than if I visit your country, where you'll have a legal privilege to do so. Besides that, I must indicate that my espionage methods are too sophisticated for me to have to take illegal espionage actions, such as obtaining secret documents, or listening to conferences behind closed doors.”</para>
-  <para>“I.e.: you only intend to do things that a regular tourist is freely allowed to do?”</para>
+  <para>“In my opinion, you should have an interest to let me in now. After all, I am the ex-Member of the Organisation, a person with a central role and a long-term effect on politics. If I stood in charge of your security institutions, I would be very happy if I were able to interview myself, and I can't see a better chance to do that than if I visit your country, where you'll have a legal privilege to do so. Besides that, I must indicate that my espionage methods are too sophisticated for me to have to take illegal espionage actions, such as obtaining secret documents, or listening to conferences behind closed doors.”</para>
+  <para>“Oh. Do you mean that you only intend to do things that a regular tourist is freely allowed to do?”</para>
   <para>“Absolutely.”</para>
   <para>“Ah hah.” The clerk said and thought for a moment. “Know what? I'll pass on your request to the higher levels. In case you get an approval to enter the Enemy's country, I'll let you know about it by phone, as long you stay in this country.”</para>
-  <para>“I would very much like to visit your country and therefore I'm willing to wait here, even a couple of days.”</para>
+  <para>“I would very much like to visit your country and therefore I'm willing to wait here om this city, even a few days.”</para>
   <para>“All right. Goodbye.”</para>
   <para>“Goodbye to you too and thanks for your help.”</para>
-  <para>I went back to the hotel, and extended my stay (out of my own packet this time) - it was hard to know how long they will consider if to let me in the Enemy's country. I decided to continue my tour of the city, and returned to the hotel only in the evening. After I entered, I was informed at the reception that I got a message from the Enemy's embassy which informed me that I was allowed to enter the Enemy's country.</para>
+  <para>I went back to the hotel, and extended my stay (out of my own packet this time) - it was hard to know how long they will consider if to let me in the Enemy's country. I decided to continue my tour of the city, and returned to the hotel only in the evening. Afterwards, I was informed at the reception that I got a message from the Enemy's embassy which informed me that I was allowed to enter the Enemy's country.</para>
   <para>So I went the other day's morning to the Embassy and filled all the other necessary forms. After the visit to the Embassy, I managed to order one of the last tickets to a flight that left that very evening. I went after a few hours to the airport, where after longer than usual arrangements (due to the special permit I was given), I boarded an airplane that flew directly to the Enemy's country.</para>
   </chapter>
   <chapter id="interview_with_the_enemy">
       <info><title>Interviewing with the Enemy</title></info>
-  <para>After I landed in the airport I ordered a hotel in one of the main cities in the Enemy's country and took a cab that went there. On the way I was able to see the view around, and despite the closeness to my country, it was much different from what was known to me. I'm not talking about the climate - the country was simply more developed. The economy of the Enemy's country is far from being perfect, but it is still considered to be one of the countries of the other part of the world.</para>
-  <para>After I rose up in the morning and started to tour it (with a direct intention to gather intelligence information) I noticed that the atmosphere there was not much different from what I remembered in my country. However, it bothered me that all the people I asked accepted Aristotle's Organum without a doubt. I assumed that that what would happen, but I hope the publication of my book will change this fact even there.</para>
+  <para>After I landed in the airport, I reserved a hotel room in one of the main cities in the Enemy's country and took a cab that went there. On the way I was able to see the view around, and despite the closeness to my country, it was much different from what was known to me. I'm not talking about the climate - the country was simply more developed. The economy of the Enemy's country is far from being perfect, but it is still considered to be one of the countries of the other part of the world.</para>
+  <para>After I got up in the morning, and started to tour it (with a direct intention to gather intelligence information), I noticed that the atmosphere there was not much different from what I remembered in my country. However, it bothered me that all the people I asked accepted Aristotle's Organum without a doubt. I assumed that that what would happen, but I hope the publication of my book will change this fact even there.</para>
   <para>It was in the middle of that day when a black car stopped next to me and a man that wore sun-glasses came out from the seat next to the driver's seats. He said to me in a thick voice: “The ex-Member of the Organisation, in order to prevent unpleasantness, please enter and sit at the back seat of the car.”</para>
-  <para>“Sir,” I replied, “I have a natural tendency to create unpleasantness, but I am willing to suppress it for the while and thus I'll cooperate.” I said that and entered the car through the back door which was already open. I saw that outside the car, the man that wore the sun-glasses, closed the back door and entered the car himself. The car drove away, and after a short drive stopped in front of a fortified building. </para>
-  <para>I was instructed to get out of the car and after I exited from it, the guards in the entrance to the building let me and the man from the front in. He led me in a couple of hallways until we reached a door. The door opened into a window-less room, inside which there was a desk. On one of its side sat a man, that I assumed was the investigator, and in its other side was a vacant chair. The man that escorted me, told me to sit there, and then closed the door in which we entered and sat down at a chair on the side.</para>
+  <para>“Sir,” I replied, “, I have a natural tendency to create unpleasantness, but I am willing to suppress it for the while, and thererfore, I'll cooperate.” I said that and entered the car through the back door which was already open. I saw that outside the car, the man that wore the sun-glasses, closed the back door and entered the car himself. The car drove away, and after a short drive stopped in front of a fortified building. </para>
+  <para>I was instructed to get out of the car and after I exited from it, the guards in the entrance to the building let me and the man from the front in. He led me in a couple of hallways until we reached a door. The door opened into a window-less room, which had a desk inside. On one of its sides, sat a man, that I assumed was the investigator, and in its other side was a vacant chair. The man that escorted me, told me to sit there, and then closed the door in which we entered and sat down at a chair on the side.</para>
   <para>The investigator addressed me and said: “Are you the ex-Member of the Organisation?”</para>
   <para>“Yes, sir.”, I answered him.</para>
   <para>“We would like to ask you a few questions regarding the Organisation and we hope, for your and our sake, that you will cooperate with us.”</para>
   <para>“Because I wanted to resign from it.”</para>
   <para>“And why did you want to resign from the Organisation?”</para>
   <para>“So I'll have a good excuse if somebody asks me why I resigned from it.”</para>
-  <para>The investigator seemed a bit confused but went on to investigate me: “O.K., Please describe to us in general your service in the Organisation.”</para>
+  <para>The investigator seemed a bit confused but went on to investigate me: “Very well. Please describe to us your service in the Organisation, in general terms.”</para>
   <para>“Generally, I served in the Organisation by following my commander's orders in our trial to kill as many soldiers from your army as possible.”</para>
   <para>“Would you be a little more specific?”</para>
   <para>“But you asked me to describe the service in general.”</para>
   <para>“All right. Can you describe it in a more detailed way?”</para>
-  <para>“Of course. I remember what happened in a rather detailed manner. I started to serve in November 5, 1996 at 8:03 exactly. For five minutes I waited outside the registration room and then I was let in. The interviewer asked me for my name and I answered him. Then he asked me for my address, my telephone number, my marital status… ”</para>
-  <para>The investigator interrupted me: “O.K.! O.K.! Forget it. Describe the motivation of the members of the Organisation to me.”</para>
+  <para>“Of course. I remember what happened in a rather detailed manner. I started to serve in November 5, 1996 at 8:03 exactly. For five minutes, I waited outside the registration room and then I was let in. The interviewer asked me for my name and I replied. Then he asked me for my address, my telephone number, my marital status… ”</para>
+  <para>The investigator interrupted me: “O.K.! O.K.! Forget it. Describe the amount of ambition to fight of the members of the Organisation to me.”</para>
   <para>“Look, I only know for certain what was the motivation of my comrades from the post, may they rest in peace, but because they are not longer among the living, I don't think it would be very helpful to you.”</para>
   <para>“And what about those who serve in other posts?”</para>
   <para>“It changes from post to post. The mutual relationship between the commander of the post to the members of the Organisation that are under his command can very much affect the willingness of the members to fight the Enemy.”</para>
   <para>“How?”</para>
   <para>“If the relationship between them is good, they are more willing to do so.”</para>
   <para>“Ah hah. Can you tell me what was the attitude of your comrades toward the Enemy, the Supporter or the Occupier?”</para>
-  <para>“Yes. As far as I remember we hated the Enemy and despised the Occupier, even though we acknowledged the fact that he allows us a freedom of action against the Enemy.”</para>
+  <para>“Yes. From what I recall, we hated the Enemy and despised the Occupier, even though we acknowledged the fact that he allows us a freedom of action against the Enemy.”</para>
   <para>“We already know that!”</para>
   <para>“Excellent! Now you have a more solid basis to assume that.”</para>
-  <para>“Very well. Tell me - what weaponry and equipment and in what quantity did you have in the post?”</para>
+  <para>“Very well. Tell me: what weaponry and equipment, and in what quantity,  did you have in the post?”</para>
   <para>“All the weapons and equipment that we had were destroyed because of the tragic battle that occurred there between the men of the post to themselves.”</para>
   <para>“Can you tell me anything about the equipment and the weaponry that is kept by other posts?”</para>
   <para>“No. I wasn't interested in what went on in other posts, because I was too concerned with the affairs of my own post. You see, I never thought I'll ever have to give intelligence information for the other side.”</para>
   <para>“In my appreciation, the fighting ability of my comrades ranged between an excellent fighting ability to a very low fighting ability, with a tendency to concentrate in either of the two extremes, or in any level between them.”</para>
   <para>“Do you have any other information that can aid us in our struggle against the Organisation?”</para>
   <para>“Of course, I can explain Newton's Second Law of Motion to you. It's a very useful law and is almost compulsory for effective military warfare.”</para>
-  <para>“The men of our military know and understand Newton's Second Law of Motion very well, and I'm sure they use it a lot for many purposes in the routine management of the military.”</para>
+  <para>“The men of our military know and understand Newton's Second Law of Motion, very well, and I'm sure they use it a lot for many purposes in the routine management of the military.”</para>
   <para>“You see: even you agree that it's useful! But since you already know it, I don't suppose that there's a use for me to explain it to you. I can guide you in other fields of physics that I'm familiar with.”</para>
   <para>“That won't be necessary. I'm afraid I'm out of questions to ask you.”</para>
-  <para>“Excellent.” I replied, “Because I'm out of answers too: I made an effort that my answers will be as to the point and as informative as possible, but at a certain point, I too ran out of available knowledge.”</para>
+  <para>“Excellent.” I replied, “Because I'm out of replies too. I made an effort that they will be as to the point and as informative as possible, but at a certain point, I too ran out of available knowledge.”</para>
   </chapter>
   <chapter id="with_enemies_like_this">
       <info><title>With Enemies Like This, Who Needs Friends?</title></info>