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Add some final touches to We are Q's.

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 <h2>Q - The Invisible</h2>
 
 <p>
-Q is the one ring of the lord of darkness (= the Q continuum). Even if he's
-fictional and imaginary, he is alive - he lives in our soul. Q's legacy was
+Q is the one ring of the lord of darkness (= the Q continuum). He is “The
+Invisible”, the most legendary vampire profile of all who was believed that
+they would never be found signifying the invisible hand that guides history.
+Even if he's fictional and imaginary, he is alive - he lives in our hearts
+and minds. Q's legacy was
 that he jumpstarted what is now one of the universe's most advanced 
 civilisations, while still not being omnipotent (which is a logical
 and mathematical impossibility), and still starting off as a mortal. What
 made Q extraordinary, is that he was a ring who expected anyone else to be
 rings. Not only that, but he expected everyone else to become Qs and thus
-to infinity.
+multiply exponentially.
 </p>
 
 <p>
 not too subversive. She will likely be someone like 
 <a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Christina_Grimmie">Christina Grimmie</a>.
 Ms. Grimmie may only be a vampirella, but if she is determined, she too 
-can become a ring and a Q and so can you.
+can become a ring and a Q. And so can you.
 </p>
 
 <h2>What will the Qs be like?</h2>
 individual people, but actually focused on dispelling their prejudices and
 superstitions. The Dispeller is one step ahead of The Slayer like The Liberator
 was one step ahead of The Free, and the Liberal was one step ahead of
-Liberator. (And who knows what the future brings.).
+Liberator. (And who knows what the future will bring.).
 </p>
 
 <p>
 Despite being Qs, they will never look down on other vampires or even other
 mortals, because they know that they don't know, and that dismissing a less
-experienced or talented person as someone who cannot teach them anything
+experienced, or less talented, person, as someone who cannot teach them 
+anything
 is something only "fools" do, and an <a 
     href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ad_hominem">ad-hominem</a>. Some very
 inexperienced people can beat highly experienced ones at their own game,
 Finally, the Qs will not aim to be "original", they will aim to be good.
 They will restore the age-long tradition of fan art (which is prevalent
 in such ancient books as the Hebrew Bible and the Greek writings), and it will 
-be considered a first-class citizen to having 100% original artworks.
+be considered a first-class citizen, in comparison to having 100% original 
+artworks.
 </p>
 
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